This week for writing we were doing tasks around a poem called hide and seek.
One of the tasks was to write about our experience playing spotlight or hide and seek.
Here is mine:
I really like this blog post, it was very eye catching and so was the title, I think it was very cool that you got to do this and writing, but as well your writing is amazing
Maybe next time you put change some of the colours for them to be easier to read, and aswell maybe explain a bit more about the writing
But apart from that its very good. Kind regards Grace
I really enjoyed reading your piece of writing about playing Hide and Seek! I can just imagine you hiding quietly in the closet waiting to be found. It must have been a good hiding spot as it sounds like it took them a while to find you! I like the way that you built the suspense through the story, it was great. I like playing hide and seek, it it one of my favourite games. I remember going on a school camp to Shantytown a few years ago with my daughters class. We played it at night around Shantytown! It is fun!! Keep up the great work! I look forward to reading more of your work while we are all working from home!
How are you and your beautiful family doing? Are you enjoying Learning from Home? I like your Hide and Seek poem. You have added a nice onomatopoeia word "creak" and a nice adjective "strip of light". Good on you. Ka pai to mahi. I am looking forward to seeing what you post next. It is great that you are sharing your learning online. See you again soon, Mrs Gully/Abi
Kia ora Arielle, What an interesting description of Hide and Seek. It seems you have played this game and enjoy it. I like the way you tell about the risk of noisy coathangers! Hiding in the large wardrobe was one of my favourite games as a child too.
Kia Ora,
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I really like this blog post, it was very eye catching and so was the title,
I think it was very cool that you got to do this and writing, but as well your writing is amazing
Maybe next time you put change some of the colours for them to be easier to read, and aswell maybe explain a bit more about the writing
But apart from that its very good.
Kind regards
Grace
Hi Arielle
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your piece of writing about playing Hide and Seek! I can just imagine you hiding quietly in the closet waiting to be found.
It must have been a good hiding spot as it sounds like it took them a while to find you!
I like the way that you built the suspense through the story, it was great. I like playing hide and seek, it it one of my favourite games. I remember going on a school camp to Shantytown a few years ago with my daughters class. We played it at night around Shantytown! It is fun!!
Keep up the great work! I look forward to reading more of your work while we are all working from home!
Talk again soon
Mrs Costello :)
Kia Ora Arielle,
ReplyDeleteHow are you and your beautiful family doing? Are you enjoying Learning from Home?
I like your Hide and Seek poem. You have added a nice onomatopoeia word "creak" and a nice adjective "strip of light". Good on you. Ka pai to mahi.
I am looking forward to seeing what you post next. It is great that you are sharing your learning online.
See you again soon,
Mrs Gully/Abi
Kia ora Arielle, What an interesting description of Hide and Seek. It seems you have played this game and enjoy it. I like the way you tell about the risk of noisy coathangers! Hiding in the large wardrobe was one of my favourite games as a child too.
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